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Meretricious

I am always late for the event (not even elegantly late, but REALLY late), but do join us over at dVerse Poets Pub for the Open Link Night.  Today it’s all about the poetry of the everyday, the mundane, the meretricious…

 

‘Awkward,’ he said,

dashing out of her bedroom and into her brain.

Forever to measure the yokels who followed,

the husband found wanting,

the wood left entangled,

the burbling of Jabberwocks

that filtered and flitted,

never to be caught again.

 

So they lived and soldiered on,

grim lines they furrowed,

objective: silence.

Not the harmonious calm of unspoken shared thoughts

but the hush for fear of a storm.

So they dealt with the past.

Not brushed aside but lulled,

put to pasture,

With nervous asides for skittish breaks.

 

Non-mention will cicratize the wounds.

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24 thoughts on “Meretricious

  1. putting the past to pasture is not a bad thing at all…not easy to do though…takes some work…really nice flow to this…read through it a few times…

  2. Marina Sofia – What an elegant way to describe the kind of silence between people who don’t want to face the past. This is lovely – just lovely!

  3. 1emeraldcity on said:

    This kind of “neutrality” can cut deeper than the loudest and most painful of accusations and insults. Very very well done!

  4. oh yes..there is silence and silence… outwardly the same but the difference couldn’t be bigger… some things can be laid to rest without discussing but others need to be talked through to really find that place of peace…well penned

    • much not muck – a Freudian slip – lol

      • There’s no such thing as an unintentional slip…. (just joking – my fingers have often typed the weirdest stuff without my mind noticing). But it’s spot on: mucky silence – that thick treacle of unspoken mud…

    • Thank you so much for your visit and comment, Claudia. How do you manage to look at all the poems on Open Link Night? I am impressed. I try my best but never get around to all of them – it’s like overeating.

  5. There is so muck brooding in that silence – love this! The images are vivid and strong

    • I can live with that adjective, thank you very much! Maybe not on an everyday basis (imagine having to live up to that when you get out of bed, before you wash your face or have coffee).

  6. The past should stay where it is, Marina. Well said. Thanks for visiting me.

    Pamela

  7. “but the hush for fear of a storm”….so many great lines in this poem. Very well expressed :)

  8. Thank you for visiting and look forward to sharing and reading lots more poems on dVerse Poets Pub!

  9. Oh how this touches, quite gently – appropriately so , on those barriers in an established relationship, which are so hard to break down. Gosh, well played, M’am.

  10. dragyonfly on said:

    There is so much here…so many great lines and emotions. You capture so well the concept of discontent in this grouping of words….

    “grim lines they furrowed,

    objective: silence.

    Not the harmonious calm of unspoken shared thoughts

    but the hush for fear of a storm.

    So they dealt with the past.

    Not brushed aside but lulled,

    put to pasture,

  11. Oh, how sad. I witnessed this kind of silence and my young mind could only hope for the best for the couple involved and for the family. This is so very tenderly and poignantly written. :-)

  12. This felt like it flowed good when it read it aloud. I like the way its structured and some of the imagery is nice. Its definitly got a sad tone to it as well but it doesn’t jump down your throat too much.

    Not the harmonious calm of unspoken shared thoughts

    but the hush for fear of a storm.

    That line stood out for me in particular, really harked back to the ‘awkward’ talked about at the start and just felt like it summed up a lot of modern day situations. Enjoyed it thoroughly and your others, any chance you could check out my blog when you get a chance. Many thanks!

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