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Something in the Water

At night she starts

and wakes to snores.

Or quiet breath

in parallel worlds.

Sweet kiss of dreams

is her sly companion.

Only

never

alone

 

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22 thoughts on “Something in the Water

  1. oy..that gave me shivers a bit…the parallel worlds… somehow sounds like you can see and hear the other from your own world but they don’t really touch.. cool images…maybe the chill is in the title which is excellent.. hints to something hidden…way cool

  2. sounds like long time lovers to me.

  3. Beautifully gentle and caring.

  4. lots of mystery to this piece…something otherworldly…or another thought is a rather sad one…the desire to never being alone can lead to some pretty dark places…

  5. I understood this to mean that even if she may be alone in real life she can have love in her dreams. “Dreamland” can indeed be a parallel life and very real sometimes. I didn’t find this eerie…perhaps even a bit comforting for the person. Dreams sometimes CAN fulfill (momentarily) what is missing in life.

  6. She’s not alone – she has her dreams. This is a great piece .. .think there are a lot of layers; I’d have to read it over and over to delve into it :) I like poetry like that :)

  7. Normally I don’t construct narratives where there aren’t any, but when I ask why she’s alone, then look at the title, I see someone sleeping curled up in a small boat. Sorry if that’s silly…

  8. The loneliness of lying beside someone snoring is the worst kind… in the dreams you might find company… well that’s what I understood….

  9. The psychological insight here is palpable, your economy allows the reader’s mind space to fill in the blanks. Wonderful.

  10. A concise write with deep meaning, Marina. We can sometimes be in a crowd and feel lonely.

    Pamela

  11. Kutamun on said:

    Your right , we are never alone, particularly writers and poets ! ….though sometimes we are lonely

  12. There is something chilling about this piece. I really like it!

  13. hey this is so mysterious … love and a dash of sadness and soothing from the different world! loved it.

  14. A cool piece !

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