Purple sheets and iron rings
Seduction blares
A trumpet whore.
But I prefer the subtle strokes
of half-guessed thoughts.
Aslant leaves all to be desired.
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Excellent poem, vivid imagery love it.
You’ll never guess, but it was 50 Shades of Grey which inspired it… in a way.
the subtle strokes
of half-guessed thoughts…. hmmm…. seduction is def. a game with lots and lots of subtle nuances…. nice…
Thank you, Claudia, you’re a mistress of the sideways look, I think…
Marina Sofia – This is so evocative! I love the way you use shades and imagery here.
Glad you detect some imagery here, as it was mainly an auditive poem for me (as always).
this is part of the beauty of knowing someone…discovering what their pleasures are….the seduction does not stop after marriage either…the game goes on…if you play it well….
And you do, Brian, as I can tell from your poetry…
I like the idea of ‘half – guessed thoughts.’ It is always interesting to think about what someone else is saying & just where the conversation is leading & what is BEHIND the expressed thoughts. A good conversation is more than meets the eye.
Hearing between the lines, not just reading between them…
I love the subtle strokes & half guessed thoughts ~ Seduction is a mind game, you know ~ Thanks for linking up ~
Most definitely a mind game…
It’s my pleasure to link up with you all at dVerse Poets – I learn so much every time!
Half-guessed thoughts – mmmhmmm indeed! They are the very heart of a good seduction. Well done!
Too much of an open book is sometimes off-putting – thank you for confirming this…
“Purple sheets and iron rings”: no mystery there. “Subtle strokes
of half-guessed thoughts”: much more seductive.
I was thinking of entitling this ‘To be continued…’. Thank you for your visit and comments!
Subtlety of mind is always more attractive than blatant seduction techniques!
Ah, but that’s because we are poets and cannot say anything too directly… right?
I too prefer the subtle strokes.
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
Thank you, Mark. I tried to visit your website and found that you hadn’t updated anything since 5th of May, so perhaps the link is not to your current site?
Wonderful! I especially loved half-guessed thoughts and aslant leaves!
Seduction blares a trumpet whore is brilliant.
I think I prefer the subtle thoughts to the blatant trumpet to.. love how your words roll on the tongue…
Nice…….you say a a lot in this small paragraph or stanza…I’m with the majority here.;)
a very seductive poem.
Nice. Def prefer subtlety. It adds to the mystique of a seduction. I like your write.
Yes, subtlety is my preference too… although too subtle and I might just miss it!
Oui … la séduction doit être un art subtil …
I think your approach is best.
Never use a hammer will a feather will more than do. Loved it, especially those “subtle strokes / of half-guessed thoughts.” That indeed is the dance.
“aslant”– yes. sometimes less is more in that seduction game, truly.
Very clever–aslant leaves is a phrase with wonderful posibilities, multiple meanings. Thanks for your advice on my poem. k.
Evocative and good!