Over at dVerse Poets Pub, the friendliest poetry hangout in town, Tony invites us to explore a new poetic form – as yet nameless. It is based on the American cinquain, but with a few additional syllables. The result is a five-line poem with lines of 3, 5, 7, 9 and 3 syllables in that order. A good way to get unstuck from the current poetic silence that seems to be governing my writing life! And the name I suggest for this poetic form? Topolino, because it reminds me of the original Fiat 500 – small, compact, economical.
Sunset glow
on weary snow peaks:
the further we go, the more
depth to fall, shores to conquer, tremble…
Just now: glow.
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I like your use of this form a lot, Marina Sofia! And it captures beautifully the balance between moving on with life’s learnings, etc., and at the same time appreciating the ‘now.’
Ah, the glow of a beautiful sunset can inspire awe…and yes, perhaps even a tremble!
Love the contrast between what lies ahead and what there is in this moment; these shorter forms are great for simply catching the moment because you don’t have room to do much more than that.
Thanks for joining in … smiles
And yet it’s better suited to the English language than a haiku, so it has a bit of space to breathe… Thanks for the inspiration – it’s the first new poem I’ve written in a long, long while.
First i like that you have used glow in both the first and last line. I think the form lends itself to symmetry.. and then to talk about the weary snowy peaks — I love when using a surprising adjective.
Yes, enjoy the moment and glow. Lovely Alps photo which, combined with your words, evoked a lot of childhood holidays in Switzerland.
just enjoy the glow for the moment…and fear not the fall….we all fall….smiles….the colon to glow gives this a cool effect as well, making it stand apart there in the end….
“Just now: glow.”-
Perfect. 🙂
-HA
A neat poem for a neat form—and I love the name ‘Topolino’, I had one in the 70’s and adored it 🙂
Almost like haiku in how it captures that moment…the glow leading us yet causing us to still tremble. A peaceful poem for a “revolutionary” form!
I love the metaphore of that last line, too often we forget to enjoy the present. Very nicely crafted.
Love the repetition and weary peaks. Great poem
Lovely stuff! We should glow now and forever, enjoying every moment.
Anna :o]
Terrific use of the Maude Cinquain; evocative, rich, emotional, philosophical; enjoyed it a lot. In this case, one (cinquain) is not a lonely number; it is just right.
Thanks for putting a positive spin on things, as usual. It was actually the fact I couldn’t think of another cinquainette or Topolino or Maude cinquain.
cool catching that one moment
Beautiful “maudefied” cinquain, Marina Sofia. This one glows!
I love how you have taken a sunset and turned it into an invitation to do…more…even if for now we just enjoy the sunset.
O, go far! Follow the sunsetting even into the sea!
Exquisite…
I must say… love the name Topolino! This piece of gentle poetry fits the photograph to a T… is photography a second talent of yours alongside poetry writing? ❤
I wish! Actually, I was looking for a better picture I have somewhere of sunset colouring Mont Blanc in pink, but couldn’t find it, so made do with the Jura. I’m just blessed to be living in this beautiful area.
Oh you are lucky to be living in such a beautiful environment! I live in Hong Kong where the mountains are a background behind the yellow cranes of construction.. hahas 😛
A friend of mine from here may be moving there for her husband’s job. He’s keen, she’s less so. I’ve heard it’s a great place to visit, though.
“just now, glow”
Fantastic – pregnant with the past and future, the ridge’s moment’s joy
Glow for now, the moment is perfect ~
You convey a lot within this brief form!
Lovely.
Glow while you can, those other shores can wait one more day. Lovely.
Topolino is molto bene, like your gem!
Very perceptive, I love the acknowledgement of the future but the glow of the present! Fantastic