General Downer ordered Captain Pain to wake me up early,
each nail driven flush, head screwed on backwards.
Lieutenant Doubt brought in wedges, Sergeant Fear drilled the holes
in a blancmange of self-esteem curdled by HMV (Her Mother’s Voice).
If Admiral Alcohol could float all our boats,
if Rear-Vice-Sub-Private would only obey,
if Colonel Attitude would finally kick in
to set fire to boot camps, clear the fog
of bullying tactics, stomp on officers’ messes.
Meander, sweet nothings, refuse to cower, shouted at,
moved like chess pieces on an invisible board.
Raise your meek bosoms in the rousing language
of nineteenth century phrasing, triumphant with Verdi,
gallant with Radetzky, drunk with Turkish lore.

Oh, that ending! “…drunk with Turkish lore.” Well done!
I was thinking of Mozart’s Marche a la turque, but of course it does fit current situation in Turkey too…
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Don’t think I ever published a poem on my blog. Let’s call it ‘A First Step’…
Oh, thank you! Am I converting you to poetry?
I doubt that I will one day become a “fan” But from time to time one or the other. Traditional haiku by preference
Well done, Marina Sofia. I really like your analogy here very much. A battle we all face, think…
Battle’s the word!… Excellent pun!
Love the first two lines!
They’re the ones that came to me with no effort, in a flash…
I liked all the internal military characters adding their contributions to the battle along with HMV.
Once I mentioned one military grade, the others just kept on coming…
Wonderfully clever, Marina. I’ve encountered all of those army personnel many times…. :s
Nothing like a rousing march to see them off… one hopes…
A clever analogy and, like Frank, I enjoyed the internal military characters adding their contributions to the battle along with HMV.
Clever indeed. I very much enjoyed this.
Outstanding.
Love all those names… it reminded me of something from the military: war is mostly waiting… but if it with those officers waiting is a torture.
ooowhoooo….feeling charged already…fantastic 🙂 🙂
Boot camp is hell. Good write.
Those night marches of “wish I had'” and “could have” can be deadly. Better to do as you advise and get drunk on Turkish lore! Well done!
What an absolutely clever write! Loved it….read it twice to catch it all 🙂
A wonderful analogy and very clever write Marina, its message can be applied to so many situations too at a personal and global level :o) xxx
Clever…loved the poem!